tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8451768142116083239.post6194640917571014044..comments2023-10-31T10:12:37.109-06:00Comments on Working My Muse: Without Further Ado...Erichttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07823808700523297184noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8451768142116083239.post-28622896314888175052009-03-24T22:32:00.000-06:002009-03-24T22:32:00.000-06:00Thanks for the comments. Chad, I will definitely ...Thanks for the comments. Chad, I will definitely take all of your notes to heart.Erichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07823808700523297184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8451768142116083239.post-91702817530590439412009-03-24T02:30:00.000-06:002009-03-24T02:30:00.000-06:00An interesting start. I made some alterations to ...An interesting start. I made some alterations to it, but many of them are probably of some personal preference. Take it as you will :)<BR/><BR/>The windows on the Metro were covered with a thick layer of ice and snow when Jonathon raised his head up. (You might try describing this more... “raised his tired head up.”)<BR/><BR/>Looking around, he saw his mom asleep in the front seat and his Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8451768142116083239.post-41537579212844368922009-03-22T08:29:00.000-06:002009-03-22T08:29:00.000-06:00I like this very much! Thanks for dropping by my b...I like this very much! Thanks for dropping by my blog!Michelle H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117937124348728578noreply@blogger.com